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I need help writing my persuasive piece.In preparation of my english exam next week, I...

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thisisalongword | Student, Grade 11 | (Level 1) Salutatorian

Posted November 13, 2011 at 8:12 PM via web

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I need help writing my persuasive piece.

In preparation of my english exam next week, I am practicing on writing persuasive pieces on various articles. The article I am writing on is in the following link:

http://www.theage.com.au/opinion/society-and-culture/with-american-lingo-weve-imported-toxic-us-culture-20100805-11kmn.html

I have started on my introduction, but haven't quite finished it as I need help on what else to write or add in my introduction as well as give a bit of information of what I'm about to write in my body paragraphs. My start is here:

The article, "With American lingo, we've imported toxic US culture" is written by a Melbourne writer named Andrew Herrick who exposes the idea that the American language and culture is adversely the Australian way of life.

Also, my supporting arguments that I may be discussing is:

- The American way of life threatens the Australians cultural values
- Deteriorations in law and order
- Connecting American language with the worst of society

If you think I'm doing something wrong or need to improve on, please correct me, I want to develop my writing skills and be ready for the coming exam. Please reply as soon as possible. Thank you.

 

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ms-einstein | High School Teacher | (Level 1) Assistant Educator

Posted November 13, 2011 at 10:12 PM (Answer #2)

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Congratulations on your desire to improve your writing. Just like everything else, better writing takes practice. I suggest sharing your goals with your English teacher. Feedback is important to improve your writing.

Here are some tips I noticed from your writing.

1. Capitalize proper nouns like English.

2. Review the use of prepositions such as “on” and “of.” Prepositions link parts of a sentence. Commonly, they show the location of something--above, under, on, beside. Trickier prepositions link logical ideas in a sentence. For example: In preparation FOR my English exam next week, I am practicing writing persuasive pieces ABOUT various articles. I am writing an essay on the following topic.

Avoid long sentences that can lose the reader. Consider these revisions to your introduction: Melbourne writer Andrew Herrick is alarmed that American culture is poisoning Australia. In his article, “With American Lingo, We’ve Imported Toxic U.S. Culture,” Herrick argues common American sayings are infiltrating Australian English. These imported phrases are triggering subtle changes in the Aussie way of life.

Here is the conventional structure of a five-paragraph persuasive essay:

1. Introduction. Try to grab your reader’s attention with a catchy opening. Restate the question in your own words. (Pretend the reader, your teacher, has no idea what you are writing about.) Be sure to clearly state your view and hint at your arguments to follow.

2. The next three paragraphs include your arguments. Start with your strongest argument first, your next best argument second, and a strong argument last. Include facts, details, and examples to support to arguments. To develop your arguments, take time to brainstorm and organize your ideas. You can make a quick outline, web, or chart, whatever works best for you. Students often hate taking a few minutes to brainstorm and organize, but these steps ensure you write a thoughtful, well-organized essay.

3. Conclusion. Wrap up your ideas and opinion. Do not introduce any new concepts. Try for a catchy opening that will leave the reader with something to think about. “Do you want Australia to become like America?”

Students often find some writing techniques that are easier for them than others. For catchy openings and closings, some young writers like rhetorical questions, “imagine” statements, or a description of the problem or situation.

 

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belarafon | High School Teacher | (Level 2) Educator Emeritus

Posted November 14, 2011 at 8:29 AM (Answer #3)

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To be truly persuasive, you need to back up all your conclusions with verifiable data from outside sources. Try to find sources that are peer-reviewed or otherwise accepted as honest and truthful -- many online sources cannot be trusted as their information changes. If you use Wikipedia as a source, remember that many schools do not accept it as authoritative, and instead use the reference links they provide at the bottom of articles as your sources. Remember to cite and source all your information in the text and in the bibliography; see OWL at Purdue for information on correct citation style.

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vangoghfan | College Teacher | (Level 2) Educator Emeritus

Posted November 25, 2011 at 7:34 AM (Answer #4)

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Here's a handout I prepared for my classes; it may help you with structure. It tries to explain, step by step, how to write the introduction, body, and conclusion of an argumentative or persuasive paper.  Good luck with your project (or with future, similar projects, since this advice seems to be coming a bit too late).

http://web.archive.org/web/20010224040300/http://www.litpage.com/

 

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vangoghfan | College Teacher | (Level 2) Educator Emeritus

Posted November 25, 2011 at 7:36 AM (Answer #5)

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On the main link I gave you above, scroll down to the link that says "Clearly structured essays."

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mwestwood | College Teacher | (Level 3) Distinguished Educator

Posted November 27, 2011 at 1:34 PM (Answer #6)

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enotes also has links that can assist you in writing a persuasive essay.  Be sure to explain your premise thoroughly and provide necessary backgroup information.  Don't forget to refute any arguments that are contrary to your premise.  [Remember that language and culture are really the same thing]

Here is a link on how to write an argumentative essay:

http://www.enotes.com/topics/how-write-argumentative-essay

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litteacher8 | Middle School Teacher | (Level 1) Distinguished Educator

Posted January 18, 2012 at 2:38 AM (Answer #7)

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A strong persuasive essay makes an appeal to emotion, especially in the beginning.  Pull on your reader's heart strings, and make the reader really think about the topic.  You want to control what they are thinking when.

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