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rosangelsam | Student, Undergraduate | eNotes Newbie

Posted April 5, 2010 at 4:47 PM via web

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I need help with a thesis statement for an essay on child obesity.

I want to say that parents should stop pointing fingers at the fast food industry and start taking some responsibility.

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pohnpei397 | College Teacher | (Level 3) Distinguished Educator

Posted April 5, 2010 at 4:52 PM (Answer #2)

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I am not really sure what food addiction is, and I'm not sure I would put it in here.  So I'll leave that one out.  I think what I would put in its place would be excessively busy schedules.  So then I would write a thesis statement like this:

In the United States today, we have an epidemic of childhood obesity.  When we think about this problem, we point fingers at restaurants like McDonalds, saying their foods and serving sizes are to blame.  However, I would argue that our lifestyles are really to blame.  We are so busy that we go to fast food restaurants instead of eating healthy meals at home.  Until we stop ourselves, from going to fast food places (and from eating other premade food) the problem of obesity in the US will not go away.

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Doug Stuva | High School Teacher | (Level 3) Senior Educator

Posted April 5, 2010 at 4:57 PM (Answer #3)

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If you've done quite a bit of research and know pretty much what you want to say, then you just need to come up with a statement that summarizes it all.  But first, you want to make sure that you don't have any ideas that don't belong, or don't fit.  Looking at what you have above, I'm wondering if the idea of food addiction belongs with the rest of your ideas.  I'm not sure that is something that fits with parents taking responsibility, McDonald's, etc.  I could be wrong.

That said, it sounds to me like your final statement might serve as your thesis.  If you go with the fact that parents need to start monitoring, managing, whatever, what their kids eat, I think everything else could be used as evidence to support that. 

Of course, you probably want to be more specific than that parents should take responsibility.  You want to be able to write exactly what parents should do.  Taking responsibility is vague.  What exactly do parents need to do?  What concrete steps can parents take?  I suggest you come up with exactly what parents should do, and go with that for your thesis. 

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besure77 | Middle School Teacher | (Level 1) Senior Educator

Posted April 5, 2010 at 7:36 PM (Answer #4)

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I think that those parents who point fingers at fast food companies are the minority. I believe that most parents are smart enough to realize that fast food is a poor food option for their children. I believe there are two reasons that we choose to take our children to fast food companies and those are the simple facts that it is easier and faster, and second because we tend to spoil our children.

As far as the food addiction goes, maybe it is not the food we are addicted to but the time it takes to get that food. People are so swamped with busy schedules and it is easy to just run through to the drive thru, eat quickly, and spend more time with our families.

Your thesis statement should include your reasons for supporting your beliefs. You could also put more emphasis on how parents can take more responsibility for the food they offer their children.

Be sure to include specific examples in your paper. Research the popular fast food companies and find out statistics to back your claim. You could also do a survey of people you know with children and find out what their eating habits consist of (and if their children are obese). For those parents who tell their children "no," you can examine how they are able to do that successfully.

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lsumner | High School Teacher | (Level 2) Senior Educator

Posted July 14, 2010 at 10:17 PM (Answer #5)

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While child obesity is a growing concern among society, is it an issue that should be dealt with as to who is responsible for the obesity itself, or is it an issue that should be analysed as to what can be done about it? If a child is the responsibility of a parent or guardian, should the parent then take on total responsibility of making good decisions for his or her child? When is the child responsible for his or her decisions is a good question. When will society stop pointing fingers and take on the role of educationg all who are affected by this serious issue known as child obesity? Who is at fault should not be the prevailing question but rather what can be done to stop child obesity. Who needs to be educated on child obesity, the child or the parent? These are points to ponder when it comes to child obesity.

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litteacher8 | Middle School Teacher | (Level 1) Distinguished Educator

Posted October 5, 2011 at 12:31 PM (Answer #6)

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How about: Parents have a responsibility to prevent obesity in their children by teaching them healthy eating habits. I am all in favor of short, simple, straight to the point thesis statements. Get the job done quickly and move on to prove it in the essay.

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