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Is my thesis good ?the question is examine the the consequence of an indivdual's...

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jjayyy | Student, Grade 11 | eNotes Newbie

Posted January 16, 2012 at 12:39 PM via web

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Is my thesis good ?

the question is examine the the consequence of an indivdual's natural tendency to be ambitous .

I wrote as my thesis : A good natured person's values will change immediately when placed in a chaotic envoironment . Their state of mind becomes a variety of twisted things , greed, jealousy and ultimately evil.

I want to incorporate something about good cannot exist without evil and vice versa because they define each other . Evil being Krutz and Good be Marlow and how evil is truly within and can be brought out of a person. But I don't know how . Please help



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janamiriah | Student, Undergraduate | (Level 1) eNoter

Posted January 16, 2012 at 1:43 PM (Answer #1)

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A good thesis is basically a summary of the entire essay to come. I would say what you have is a start, but it should, in theory, be one sentence if possible. Be careful to not cram too much detail in the thesis. Whatever is in the thesis MUST follow in the paper. So, after reading your thesis I would want to see proof of how you came about these claims. Back your thesis up; you'll probably rewrite it as your paper progresses (tweaking). Don't worry about making it too long--one sentence. I think you're off to a great start, I do. Just don't cram too much into the thesis or it'll probably end up as a poorly structured sentence. :) Good luck!


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William Delaney | (Level 1) Distinguished Educator

Posted January 17, 2012 at 5:49 AM (Answer #2)

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You don't necessarily have to write a thesis statement before you write your essay. You ought to start by writing what you feel like writing and discover your thesis in the process. Maybe you don't know what you want to say until you have said it. You can't make an omelet without breaking a few eggs. Writing is always a process of self-discovery. If because of the assignment you are stuck with writing about ambition, then your thesis statement snould have to do with Kurtz's ambition. He was very successful in doing his job, which was to export lots of ivory tusks down the river. His ambition made him ruthless and wicked. Your present thesis statement is about environment; there is no mention of ambition.

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