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How can I develop a thesis statement from a factual statement?Ieed to rewrite the...

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chiquitura | Student, College Freshman | eNotes Newbie

Posted February 4, 2009 at 11:19 AM via web

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How can I develop a thesis statement from a factual statement?

Ieed to rewrite the following factual statments to make them effective thesis statments:

"A number of hospitals have refused to admit patients without health insurance because they fear that such patientsdo not have the resources to pay ther bills"

"People who watch more than five hrs of tv a day tend to think the world is more violent than the people who watch less than two hrs of tv daily"

I really need help with the whole concept.

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Susan Hurn | College Teacher | (Level 1) Educator Emeritus

Posted February 4, 2009 at 11:50 AM (Answer #2)

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Your thesis statement is a general statement you think you can explain and support with facts. Since you already have some facts, think backwards! What do your factual statements suggest to be true? Probably several things.

Your first factual statement suggests:

People without health insurance have difficulty getting medical care.

or

Hospitals are changing their procedures in regard to health insurance coverage.

These are statements that you could support with your facts.

What does your second factual statement suggest?

Watching television distorts people's perceptions of violence.

This is a general statement that you could support with your factual statement.

Your thesis makes a statement. Your facts back it up by explaining and supporting it. If you are writing a paragraph, the thesis is sometimes called the topic sentence. Good luck!

 

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chiquitura | Student, College Freshman | eNotes Newbie

Posted February 4, 2009 at 1:55 PM (Answer #3)

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On the text book is some what confising. It reads;

Your Thesis stament cannot, of course, include every point you will discuss in you essay. Still, it should be specific enough to indicate your direccion and scope. The statment "New imigration laws have failed to stem the tide of illegal immigrants" does not give your essay much focus. Which immigration laws will you be examining? Which illegal immigrants? The following sentence, however, is an effective thesis statment. It clearly indicates what the writer is going to discuss, and establishes a specific direction for the essay:

Because they do not take into account the economic causes of immigration, the 2002 immigration laws do little to decrease the number of illegal imigrants coming from Mexico into the United States.

So I understand your explanation but does not agrees with this other text. I think Im miss understanding something, Please explain.

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Susan Hurn | College Teacher | (Level 1) Educator Emeritus

Posted February 4, 2009 at 2:14 PM (Answer #4)

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On the text book is some what confising. It reads;

Your Thesis stament cannot, of course, include every point you will discuss in you essay. Still, it should be specific enough to indicate your direccion and scope. The statment "New imigration laws have failed to stem the tide of illegal immigrants" does not give your essay much focus. Which immigration laws will you be examining? Which illegal immigrants? The following sentence, however, is an effective thesis statment. It clearly indicates what the writer is going to discuss, and establishes a specific direction for the essay:

Because they do not take into account the economic causes of immigration, the 2002 immigration laws do little to decrease the number of illegal imigrants coming from Mexico into the United States.

So I understand your explanation but does not agrees with this other text. I think Im miss understanding something, Please explain.

The example is more specific, for sure. How about this?

Some hospitals now refuse to admit patients who have no health insurance.

Then you could explain who, why, and the effects of this policy.

People who watch more than five hours of television each day have a distorted view of violence.

You could then explain how their view is distorted, etc.

These thesis statements would be more specific because each one includes a fact from the writing prompt, thus narrowing it down a little.

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timbrady | College Teacher | (Level 1) Educator

Posted February 4, 2009 at 4:01 PM (Answer #5)

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Your thesis statement must contain a subject (perhaps the fact that you are speaking of), your attitude toward that subject, and, perhaps, a tri-colon (a grouping of the three major points that you want to make in your paper --- it's a famous rhetorical device that works because parallel groups of three seem to be hard wired into our thought patterns ... there's a good example at http://grammar.about.com/od/tz/g/tricolonterm.htm or http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Tricolon).

Thus you might write something like this (oversimplified) example:

Hospitals (subject) should not accept patients who cannot show proof of insurance (attitude) because hospitals are already running at a loss, the federal government does not guarantee reimbursement, and the resources used on non-paying patients cannot be used on paying patients (tri-colon).

I have no idea if the elements of this tri-colon are true or even reasonable, but I just wanted to provide you with an example and tried to use your example.

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chiquitura | Student, College Freshman | eNotes Newbie

Posted February 4, 2009 at 7:39 PM (Answer #6)

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You guys are great, Thank you so much for your help.

Thers is two more statmens that Im not sure how to word it. Either Im no getting it or my language barrier is not letting me.

  1. Several Supreme Court decisions have said that art containing explicit sexual images is not necessarily pornographic.
  2. Many women earn less money than man do, in part because they drop out of the workforce during their child-rearing years.

Any advice?

Thank you again for your help

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timbrady | College Teacher | (Level 1) Educator

Posted February 4, 2009 at 9:07 PM (Answer #7)

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A woman who does the same work as a man (subject) should receive the same salary (attitude).  (You can create a tricolon on your own .... you might work the chld-rearing idea in here, although I'm not sure how.)

Art that contains explicit sexual images (subject) should not necessary be considered pornographic (attitude) unless it violates community standards, may fall into the hands of minors, or violates the civil rights of those it portrays (tri-colon --- again not the greatest, but it's just a quick example).

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dbello | High School Teacher | (Level 1) Educator

Posted February 4, 2009 at 10:19 PM (Answer #8)

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You guys are great, Thank you so much for your help.

Thers is two more statmens that Im not sure how to word it. Either Im no getting it or my language barrier is not letting me.

  1. Several Supreme Court decisions have said that art containing explicit sexual images is not necessarily pornographic.
  2. Many women earn less money than man do, in part because they drop out of the workforce during their child-rearing years.

Any advice?

Thank you again for your help

With regard to #1.  Potential thesis statement: 'The Supreme Court of the United States has the power to interpret the meaning of the Constitution'. The court must maintain the delicate balance between the needs of the individual as well as the needs of the society as a whole. The Supreme Court is the vechicle that clarifies and defines the 1st Amendment. In a free society what one person considers obscene another might be fine with, which is why such cases as in your example present tremendous controversy. The Supreme Court does have criteria defining 'obscenity' however the interpretation of that definition depends upon those who currently make up the court. Simply stated, what was once Constitutional years ago by court decision might now be viewed as Unconstitutional, or vise versa. Investigate specific Supreme Court cases that argue explicit sexual content, you will find arguments from both sides. Give the evidence using specific cases that will affirm your thesis statement. Here are some cases that might be helpful to you:

Roth v. United States 1957

Miller v. California 1973

Young v. American Mini Theaters 1976

City of Erie v. Paps A&M 2000 

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charcunning | High School Teacher | (Level 3) Assistant Educator

Posted March 9, 2009 at 10:00 AM (Answer #9)

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Make it arguable!

A thesis statement is a statement that someone can argue with you about! So...choose a side!

So...

In spite of the Supreme Court's ruling that art containing sexually explicit images is not pornography, this type of art should be fundamentally banned from museums.

or the other side...

In following the Supreme Court's ruling that art containing sexually explicit images is not pornography, all museums should welcome this type of art into their centers as it broadens the mind of all who view it.

If you need a three-part thesis, you can add your 3 reasons on to the end (each one of the three parts then becomes a body paragraph for a 5 paragraph essay).

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suganrao | Student, Undergraduate | eNotes Newbie

Posted April 28, 2010 at 6:41 PM (Answer #10)

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i m phd student i chosen health insurance topic and i want to write statement of the problem please sample and idea for it

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