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Elaboration.I was asked to write a two paged essay on Emily's characteristic based on A...

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aliaazahar | Student, Undergraduate | eNoter

Posted December 6, 2008 at 9:15 PM via web

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Elaboration.

I was asked to write a two paged essay on Emily's characteristic based on A Rose for Emily. The thing is, I don't know how to elaborate. I mean, I'm sure I can write, but not up to two pages. Help, anyone?

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lynn30k | High School Teacher | (Level 3) Associate Educator

Posted December 7, 2008 at 3:24 PM (Answer #2)

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Write the way you speak. Pretend you are talking to someone about Emily.

I had the same problem, a long time ago. One thing I realized was that I was leaving out some things because I was assuming that since the teacher of the class knew them, s/he wouldn't want to hear them-AGAIN-in my paper. Wrong. The teacher wants to know that you know them, as well.

If you are still short on words, remember to give examples of what you are stating in a paper.  It's not enough to say the character is lonely.  What parts of the story tell you that?

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morrol | High School Teacher | (Level 1) Associate Educator

Posted December 8, 2008 at 10:11 AM (Answer #3)

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Two pages is nothing at all if you have good organization and a clear statement. Make a statement about Emily and back it up with evidence from the text. For each quote you use from the text, take a couple of sentences to explain and clarify exactly how that quote supports your original statement.

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danylyshen | High School Teacher | (Level 1) Associate Educator

Posted December 11, 2008 at 9:50 AM (Answer #4)

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Brainstorm, freewrite, or mind map out all of the characteristics you wish to discuss about Emily.

List the examples of each of Emily's characteristics from the text. Gather all of your information and organize it into an essay outline. Write your thesis at the top and list the supporting arguments which support such observations. (In this case it will be Emily's characteristics). The supporting evidence of each characteristic will be the evidence from the text complete with the page numbers.

Begin your first draft starting with the body paragraphs, then finishing with the introduction and conclusion.

Revise, rewrite, revisit. Don't concentrate on hitting a certain number of pages. Writers get spooked if they feel they "have" to write a certain number of pages. Brainstorming and an outline will give you the confidence that you have something to say and you have a wealth of information. Soon you'll see that you have TOO much to say and the trouble will be in paring down your papers to MEET the length and not exceed it. Best of luck!

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krishna-agrawala | College Teacher | Valedictorian

Posted May 26, 2009 at 5:06 PM (Answer #7)

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I can see four ways of increasing the size of an essay in a meaningful way.

  1. Increase the information contents on the subject matter. This can be done on giving information on more aspects or more details on the same aspects.
  2. Give information on related matters that puts the subject of essay in a proper perspective.
  3. Give your analysis and views on the subject.
  4. Provide information on what others have said or written on the subject.
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epollock | Valedictorian

Posted May 26, 2009 at 5:38 PM (Answer #8)

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The problem with elaboration is that many students can't find enough evidence and that results in weak analysis. Look at this model for each paragraph: Topic sentence, Evidence, Analysis (TEA).

Your topic sentence should be an assertion or an opinion that is arguable. Next, cite sources where you find that the information supports your topic sentence. Include citations as naturally as you can without using dropped quotes. Then analyze why the citation support the topic sentence and what are the implications and results for why that is so.

If you do that with each paragraph, you should have no trouble coming up with more than 2 pages. 

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accessteacher | High School Teacher | (Level 3) Distinguished Educator

Posted June 18, 2010 at 2:14 AM (Answer #9)

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I agree with other editors - the secret to making this work is to focus on planning and making sure you follow the structure given in #8. Another big strategy for you to follow that will hopefully help is to break it down into clearly identifiable middle paragraphs - each focussing on a separate and discrete topic. Then you can pace yourself and do one paragraph at a time. Breaking down big tasks into smaller ones always helps me to get these jobs done. Good luck!

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clairewait | High School Teacher | (Level 1) Educator Emeritus

Posted January 19, 2011 at 8:08 AM (Answer #10)

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Write the way you speak. Pretend you are talking to someone about Emily.

I had the same problem, a long time ago. One thing I realized was that I was leaving out some things because I was assuming that since the teacher of the class knew them, s/he wouldn't want to hear them-AGAIN-in my paper. Wrong. The teacher wants to know that you know them, as well.

If you are still short on words, remember to give examples of what you are stating in a paper.  It's not enough to say the character is lonely.  What parts of the story tell you that?

great advice for pre-writing. Use this as an initial prompt to get all of your ideas out there.  Try to fill up one or two pages (even as a list) of random thoughts, examples, and textual evidence about Emily's character.

Then, take a highlighter to it.  Do not attempt to turn this initial exercise written based on the way you speak directly into an essay.  Like all other posters have suggested, organization is key here, and if you write the way you speak, more than likely the essay will ramble, come out as an incoherent list, or lack a clear focus.

Use your first thoughts and ideas to create three categories, make lists, put similar thoughts together.  Then get rid of everything that is irrelevant to your three categories.  Then, add to the three categories any extra information that is lacking.  Add actual quotes.  Explain the context of these quotes.

By the time you go through all this you will likely have too much for 2 pages, and need to use an editing eye to determine your most important points.

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davidstardling | Student | eNotes Newbie

Posted February 2, 2012 at 6:51 PM (Answer #11)

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