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thpinky | Student, Undergraduate | eNotes Newbie

Posted September 11, 2011 at 7:03 AM via web

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Does this sentence about Flannery O'Connor have any grammatical errors?

 

Does the sentence below have any grammar errors? I feel like it's a fragment sentence or a comma splice or something. Please fix it if you can.

"The factor of violence always presents in Flannery O'connor's stories, and these acts of violence contribute to the salvation or redemption of the main character, which gives the message that for some people, salvation comes at a devastating cost."

 

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mwestwood | College Teacher | (Level 3) Distinguished Educator

Posted September 11, 2011 at 1:09 PM (Answer #1)

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The first part of the sentence it seems to have words missing; the first clause, "The factor of violence always presents in Flannery O'Connor's stories," clearly is missing its predicate.  Perhaps, it should read, "The factor of violence is always present in Flannery O'Connor's stories...." In addition, you may wish to add a noun before the word which, thus providing an antecedent for this relative pronoun.  Here is how that clause can be revised:

The factor of violence is always present in Flannery O'Connor's stories, and these acts of violence contribute to the salvation or redemption of the main character, a action which gives the message that for some people, salvation comes at a devastating cost.

There is, of course, no problem with the verity of this sentence. For, so often in O'Connor's stories, salvation does come at "a devasting cost."  For instance, in O'Connor's "A Good Man is Hard to Find," the grandmother must pay for her salvation with the lives of her son and his family let alone with her own as she finally recognizes that she, like her captor, is a sinner.  When she does recognize the Misfit, it is too late, as she is shot.

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