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rashaad64 | (Level 2) eNoter

Posted May 8, 2013 at 7:09 PM via web

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Are there any grammar or spelling mistakes in my essay?

A fantastic and dark, full pack action movie about Batman (Dark Knight) that struggles to understand his identity and past trauma (Loved ones lost) along with his duty of protecting the citizens of Gotham city that plagues the mind of the caped hero while becoming a legend before his eyes.

The Dark Knight Movie is the story behind a man named Bruce Wayne that first started leading down a path of justice from first witnessing the death of his parents at the age of eight. Both of his parents who got killed from a armed mugger in an alley left Bruce traumatized that left the first imprint on becoming the Batman. Growing up from a wealthy family and graduating from top colleges in America he soon learns that being a wealthy playboy is not all life should be while understanding this from the crime boss known as Carmine Falcone who teaches him the difference between justice and revenge. Understanding this Batman sets out a journey across the world in better understanding himself and his purpose for the next seven years. The story of Batman connects with so many people on so many levels particularly toward people holding on to the past and being isolated in a sense from the world into discovering who you are and what actions needs to be done.

Batman Begins has very sharp special effects and a deep gritty yet dark undertone about the story of Bruce Wayne and how he becomes the Batman. While traveling the world he learns from criminals along the way and is thrown into prison by police from China. After a major prison brawl he is introduced to Ducard who invites Bruce to join the League of Shadows while under Ducard training Bruce learned martial arts and his overcome fear of bats. After learning from Ducard and the Asian League of Shadows, Ducard confronts Bruce into killing a murderer for the final test of initiation but refuses as Bruce simply walk away. Bruce then destroys the headquarters of the League of Shadows and in the process saves Ducard (Bruce mentor) from the burning wreckage and leaving him at a village nearby before departing. For the Next twenty years Bruce returns back to Gotham city where he is faced with Criminals such as the scarecrow that tries to poison Gotham through the water pipes. Facing the new threat by a villain who goes by the name scarecrow and old enemies such as the League of shadows with Ducard leading the group himself Batman becomes victorious in the all out justice of saving Gotham City and becoming a hero in front of people’s eyes. Nothing cherry or uplifting about this dark Knight as it explores the inner mind and path that Bruce Wayne has to undertake in his guilt of his parents death and connections with the bats that brings this story to life.

Batman becomes a public hero and gains control over Wayne Enterprises, which in all gives the signifying theme toward the whole movie that many young generations and older generations came to love and grow with. The Movie is very dark, compelling and very articulate to many fans and viewers of the first chapter of the Batman trilogy. One person by he name of William Arnold who is a critic reviewer sated, “Technically, the film is consistently impressive. It creates a grimly gothic vision of a crime-ridden and depression-ravaged Gotham City, a dandy pair of chase sequences involving the new generation Bat mobile and a range of innovative visual effects.”

 Christopher Nolan’s input into this marvelous story and origins of the Caped Crusader gives a great insight through the story plot and structure. Having a strong cast and ominous plot the Batman Begins enthralls audiences worldwide meeting overall expectations. 

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litteacher8 | Middle School Teacher | (Level 1) Distinguished Educator

Posted May 8, 2013 at 9:31 PM (Answer #1)

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You have a great start!  The best way to begin an essay is with a strong thesis. I suggest some rewriting of your first sentence to make it a little clear and give it stronger grammar.

Dark Knight is a dark, action-packed movie about Batman’s struggles to understand his identity.  As he works to overcome past traumas, including loved ones lost, he has to balance his duty of protecting the citizens of Gotham City. This plagues the mind of the caped hero as he becomes a legend before his own eyes.

One of the things I did was italicize the title, which is important.  I also removed your parenthesis, and refocused your long sentence into three.  This gives you a framework for developing your essay.

Here are some other important tips. 

-Italicize Dark Knight every time you use it.  Avoid “movie.”  Also italicize other titles like Batman Begins.

Dark Knight is the story behind a man named Bruce Wayne who first started down a path of justice as a result of witnessing the death of his parents at the age of eight.

-The second sentence of your second paragraph is a little awkward.  Rewrite this sentence to be more direct.

When an armed mugger killed both of his parents in an alley, Bruce was left traumatized with left the first imprint of becoming Batman.

-Stick to one tense.  Your next sentence should be in past tense also.

Growing up in a wealthy family and graduating from top colleges in America, he soon learned that being a wealthy playboy was not what life should be about when the crime boss known as Carmine Falcone taught him the difference between justice and revenge.

Try to keep your sentences short and simple at first, and then combine them into longer sentences.  Use a spell and grammar check.  This will help ensure that you don't miss anything.  Also, you want to make sure that you use "a" before a consonant and "an" before a vowel.  Proofread, to look for other missing letters (such as "he name" should be "the name.")

If possible, have a friend read your essay to check for things your eyes might have missed.

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