Can anyone help me construct a creative intervention in All Quite on the Western Front by Remarque focussing on the brutality of war?The main objective is to mirror the style of writing of the...

Can anyone help me construct a creative intervention in All Quite on the Western Front by Remarque focussing on the brutality of war?

The main objective is to mirror the style of writing of the author. So its basically saying to write 800 words extra of the book, how the author would write it.

I'm stuck and don't know how to start. So anyone who has the time to help me out, I would appreciate it so much. This is where my Intervention is--Chapter 6, pg 70

“The front is a cage, and you have to wait nervously in it for whatever happens to you. Here we lie under a criss cross of shell trajectories, and we live in the tension of uncertainty.

INTERVENTION HERE (800 words needed)

“Chance is hovering over us. If there is a shot, all I can do is duck; I don’t know for sure and I can’t influence where it is going to come down”

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mwestwood | College Teacher | (Level 3) Distinguished Educator

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The important thing to remember in imitating Remarque is that style and point of view are related as both reflect the incomprehensibility and incredulity of war.  For instance, since first person point of view is employed, the sentence structure and prose mirrors the internalization of Paul Baumer.  That is, when he is in battle and anxious situations, the sentence structure is disjointed and Paul's thoughts are often impressionistic.

So, in order to stay in character with the "creative intervention," you may wish to find another battle situation from a different chapter from Six along with looking at this chapter itself, and examine the style of writing that is used in both chapters.  This examination, then, can serve as a model for you.  Remarque himself described his book as "neither an accusation nor a confession," so there is some distance of the narrator from his narration. Chapter Ten, for example, illustrates the narrator's detached narrative as he is on the battlefield which suggests that he is becoming more inured to battle,

I am afraid, but it is an intelligent fear, an extraordinarily heightened caution.  The night is windy and shadows flit hither and thither in the flicker of gunfire.  It reveals too little and too much. Often I pause, stock still, motionless, and always for nothing.  Thus I advance a long way and then turn back in a wide curve  I have not established touch with the others.  Every yard nearer our trench fills me with confidence--and with haste, too.  It would be bad to get hit now.

Now, since Chapter Six is prior to Ten, Paul obviously is more fearful and less hardened to war.  Now consider what comes prior to the passage at which you are to intervene, 

We are in low spirits....The shots are often so uncertain that they land within our own lines.  To-night two of our men were wounded by them.

So, perhaps you can start with something like this for your intervention, imitating Remarque's broken and staccato sentences that often are impressionistic,

Random shots continue to hiss past us. I am reminded of when I was a child and other boys threw stones blindly and they landed promiscuously [in an indiscriminate manner] around with some striking us in the face. --------[continue] Here in this dug-out we are caged mice.

Be sure to review what has come before the place where you are to intervene, and also review the words that will follow your intervention.  In this way, what you write should be in harmony with the text.

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alanjones24 | Student, Undergraduate | eNotes Newbie

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Hey thanks so much for your help with this. This is the best teaching I have recieved, and I would want to change my point of intervention to that spot in chapter 10 after you have explained it, but unfortunatley I cant, I have already submitted my place of intervention and you cannot change it.

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