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dentalassist | TA , Grade 9 | (Level 1) Honors

Posted October 28, 2013 at 11:49 PM via web

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I need help on an essay on something valuable learned from a teacher or a coach for a seventh grader including a dialogue exchange between the two, an interesting topic sentence, three paragrahs explaining the three examples of how they were taught the lesson, and a concluding paragraph relating to the topic sentence.

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mwestwood | College Teacher | (Level 3) Distinguished Educator

Posted October 29, 2013 at 3:03 AM (Answer #1)

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It must be established that educators at Enotes do not actually compose essays. Therefore, with that in mind, here are some ideas and suggestions that may prove helpful for the completion of the assignment as stated.

  • "Motivator"

According to The Practical Writer by Edward P. Bailey and Philip A. Powell, a good essay begins with what is called a "motivator," a quotation, an observation, a question--something that piques the interest of the reader. One relevant quote for writing about something a teacher or coach has taught a youth comes from Harper Lee's To Kill a Mockingbird in which Atticus tells his children about Mrs. Dubose, who had the courage to fight her morphine addiction before she died,

It's when you know you're licked before you begin but you begin anyway and you see it through no matter what. You rarely win, but sometimes you do.

Perhaps, then, the teacher or coach observes that the student is becoming discouraged at what he/she has been trying to accomplish. This adult approaches the student with words of encouragement, but the student gives no credence to these words. So, the adult uses Atticus Finch's words and applies them to the situation.  Here is an example:

COACH   Keith, I've noticed that you are not playing with any heart. What is wrong?

STUDENT  Coach, you know I'm not going to play in Friday's game; so what's the use?

COACH  No, I don't know that; in fact, I've been considering letting you start next game. But, it depends upon your performance in practices this week. I know that you've been reading To Kill a Mockingbird in your English class; well, there are some lines from it in which Atticus encourages his children......(here he cites the above passage)

  • Body of the essay

Using the structure of a narrative essay, the writer can then tell how the student reacts to the coach with anger or more discouragement, or with hope, forming a topic sentence from this idea and then supporting it with narrative examples of what the student does and how his/her perspective begins to change.

The second and third topic sentences can provide other ways in which the student exerts more effort and begins to experience some success. He/she talks with a best friend and expresses some hope of getting in the game on Friday. In the third paragraph dialogue can again enter as the student asks the coach if he/she can start the game on Friday. The coach praises him/her for the improved efforts, but conveys some doubt by his hesitancy. Nevertheless, the student remains determined to "see it through no matter what." 

The game day comes and the student does not start and the student grows discouraged, but determined to hope for a chance. Near the end of the game with the score tied, the first string player is hurt at the student's same position and he/she gets in the game. Inspired and determined, the student scores or makes a block that enables another to score. The crowd cheers and fellow teammates hoist the student upon their shoulders in triumph.

  • Conclusion

The concluding paragraph finds the student at school the next week; he/she now understands the meaning of Atticus's words, and expresses gratitude to the coach for what he has taught him/her.

  • Further Notes on writing a Narrative Essay

Often narrative essays are written from the perspective of a character. Doing so provides the writer the opportunity for dialogue and for the expression of this narrator's own thoughts which lend immediacy and veracity to the essay.

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